tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-866267721290479045.post3367259499422899809..comments2009-11-25T01:08:01.840-08:00Comments on G.I Joe's blog: G.I Joehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10545901015683646527noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-866267721290479045.post-60942986454624630202009-08-08T06:19:28.775-07:002009-08-08T06:19:28.775-07:00This is ok but there could have been a bit more de...This is ok but there could have been a bit more detail and more pictures in there<br />errors:<br />no title<br />big gaps in the writing – see me about how to prevent this<br />missing a fullstop in the final paragraph<br />6/10Bill Kerrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00206808014093631762noreply@blogger.com